前回の日本語訳
| The Teenage Years （１０代）
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To be honest, my teenage years were difficult. My parents got divorced when I was 15 and I lived alone with my mother after that. It was a hard time for my mother and she didn't have much energy to watch over me. As a result, I became a little wild. I wasn't a bad boy, and I still did well in school, but I didn't get a lot of adult support. At the same time, the fact that my family broke up was very painful. I had a happy childhood, but everything changed when I became a teenager. And it wasn't until I was older, in my 20s, that I could make peace with my past. Now that I'm a father, I have promised myself that I will do all I can to help my own children have a happy teenage years.
実は、私は辛い１０代を過ごしました。１５歳の時、両親が離婚し母と２人で暮らしていました。母は苦しみ、私の面倒を見る元気があまりなかったのです。その結果、私は少し荒れました。問題児というわけではなく、学校でもうまくやっていましたが、大人の助けを十分に受けられませんでした。家族がばらばらになったことはとても苦痛でした。子ども時代は幸せでしたが、１０代になってから全てが変わりました。２０代になってやっと過去を受け入れることができました。今は父親になり、子どもたちが幸せな１０代を過ごせるよう、全力を尽くそうと心に決めています。
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ベックさんのコメント
| vine eggs : |
Thank you for your kind congratulations. I thank you, too, for being such a faithful reader of Hiroshima Koku and English Challenge. Yes, the system of entrance examinations in Japan looks stressful. I'm sorry that it was a frustrating experience for you. But it's good that you had supportive friends. As for your writing, one suggestion: Instead of "When I became 20s..." use "In my 20s..."
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| MURATA : |
I think there are many advantages to growing up in a big family. I envy the experience of having a lot of brothers and sisters. Even now, when you and your siblings live in different places, I'm sure you still feel a lot of love and support for one another. Good job on your essay. Instead of using the word "rent" (which means paying money to use something), use the word "borrow" (which means using something for free).
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| SOS男 : |
I was very interested to read about your youth. You certainly worked hard to overcome the hardships of your childhood. And, as usual, your writing was very good. The first sentence, though, might read more smoothly if it was rewritten like this: "I was the youngest in a family of seven and I lost my father at the age of three." Again, thank you for sharing your story.
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| Kazuko : |
Thank you for the essay. I enjoyed reading it. It sounds like you studied really hard to pass the university entrance exam. Good for you! As for your writing, it was good, though in the first sentence the simple past tense would be fine: "When I was a high school student, (or When I was in high school,) I didn't study so much for two years." I look forward to your next essay, Kazuko!
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| aries : |
You wrote an excellent essay. I was impressed by both your writing and your thoughts. You are certainly much more mature than I was at the age of 18! Just one small suggestion about the writing itself. It might be better to cut "to me" from the end of this sentence: "I also had friends with similar interests and opinions." It now reads more smoothly and the meaning is still clear from context. Best of luck in America! Please write again if time permits!
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| Mackey : |
Thank you for writing again! Yes, the teenage years can be difficult, especially for children who have family problems. Children like that need empathy and support. About your essay, your thoughts were clear, though the first part would read more naturally in a form like this: "As I told you before, I used to work in a junior high school. I met some students there whose parents had gotten divorced. At first sight..." Have a good day!
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